Sample Student Essays #2

This time I read essays D,E and F. Out of these three essays I must say that I liked F "Contradiction of conformity: How Austen shapes our opinions of characters" the most. The author wrote on the same topic (the use of foils in character introductions) that I was considering writing on, so it was interesting to see how another person interpreted that topic and how they wrote on it compared to what I had planned. And I must say that I liked the way it was put together and I agree with the points and ideas that the author focussed on and I probably would have used the same ones if I had decided to write on that topic. Even though I don't really know which sentence is the thesis in the introduction and some of the sentences are very wordy, I still enjoyed it and think that it works well and achieves what an introduction paragraph should. And as for the rest of the essay there are a few aspects that bother me, such as the excessive use of quotes in the third paragraph, but overall I think it is a pretty good essay.